I can build and grow sentences, build and grow sentences, by using adjectives and adding
details to make sentences stronger.
Alright, very good.
I want you to turn your book to page 279.
Page 279.
At the top where it says "expanding with modifiers,"
we just spoke about modifiers how the adjectives modify what?
What did the adjective modify?
The noun, alright?
So we're using modifiers...
modifiers are words and phrases that tell more about or modify the meaning of other
words.
Modifiers can make sentences grow stronger by adding important details.
Notice how the modifiers change the following sentences...
it's simply like the ones we did yesterday.
We said...
what was the sentence you came up with yesterday?
I actually see it.
It says, "We ran and saw deer running around."
Alright.
So we added modifiers to that to make it stonger.
Same thing.
"I watched the bus leave."
How did they add modifiers to make this sentence a little stronger.
It's stronger but only a little stronger.
What does the second one say?
"I watched the last bus leave."
And the third sentence?
"Gasping for breath, I watched the last bus leave from the parking lot."
Ok, what is the difference between the two... the three... what is the difference between
the first and second sentence?
Sabria, what do you think is the difference between the first sentence and the second
sentence?
The first and the second sentence...
the first sentence is ok but the second sentence adds a little detail.
So it helps the reader not just know that the person waited for and watched the last
bus.
That gives it a little more meaning, yes?
Yes.
I don't know if anyone's ever caught the bus, but it's a terrible feeling to watch the last
bus leave.
It means that you're going to have to find another way to get to wherever you're going.
What is the difference between that sentence and the sentence following that one?
Jessica?
Um, the last one shows that he was probably at... that person was probably running waiting
for the bus and it actually left.
It adds more detail.
It helps the reader understand something... that person is actually going through... yes?
It's a big difference than saying, "I watched the last bus leave" and coming with, "Gasping
for breath, I watched the last bus leave from the parking lot."
It's a lot more detail, it's a stronger sentence.
That's why when you gave me a sentence yesterday like... who gave me one yesterday?
It was a big brown...
I saw the big brown deer.
Alright?
I think we can do a little better than the big brown deer.
One way is adding adjectives, alright?
We're going to try to have some more descriptive adjectives, right?
That are moreso on our level.
What we're going to do is go over...
what we're going to do... is we're going to get in groups and modify these sentences and
then we're going to modify our postcard and turn it into a short letter.
The postcard we wrote yesterday, we're going to make that a short letter.
Right now I'm going to give you a sheet of chart paper.
Group 1, this is what we'll do.
Group 1 you'll do sentence number 2, at the bottom.
Group 2 you'll do sentence number 3, group 4 you'll do sentence number...
no.
Group 3 you'll do sentence number four.
Group 4 you'll do sentence number 5.
We'll do sentence number 1 together.
Alright?
Someone read sentence number 1 for me, will you please?
The concert was held...
You know I can't write it that fast.
The concert was held outdoors?
Yes.
The concert was held outdoors.
I want to grow this sentence first.
First by adding adjectives.
Just by adding adjectives.
We're not going to add anything to the beginning middle or end right now.
Just adjectives.
I want you to discuss it with your group what you think would be some of the best adjectives
to add to this sentence to help it grow a little.
Think of your favorite group you want to see and that concert.
Think of each question that the adjectives answer.
It's not a secret.
The affectionate concert?
I don't know that
affectionate would be the best.
I understand where you're going but I don't know about affectionate.
Alright c'mon I'm only going to give you another minute and a half.
You're already ready.
I just want to hear... ok.
I'd actually like to do it in a different color marker.
Thank you.
Ok.
They, no, you guys gave me the first, alright?
What did you have?
The fantastic concert...
Go ahead. ...was held in
the beautiful outdoors.
You guys?
The long Mindless Behavior...
Concert, right?
Yes.
Was held...
Was held outdoors.
In the great outdoors?
Yes.
What did you guys come up with?
You have one?
The noisy Mindless Behavior...
Say it one more time.
The noisy Mindless Behavior...
Go ahead.
Mindless Behavior.
Is everyone a fan of these guys?
Yes!
Except the boys, right.
Justin likes them!
Tarzia likes them.
That's ok.
You've heard of New Edition?
Ever heard of New Edition?
All the girls liked them.
Yes.
I liked them too but I couldn't say I liked them.
Probably the same thing.
I like them now.
The noisy Mindless Behavior...
speak up.
Concert what?
Was held outdoors.
One two three and... lastly.
The reckless Black Eyed Peas concert.
The reckless Black Eyed Peas concert..
Is it Black Eye Peas?
Black Eyes Peas.
Eyed.
You sure?
Uh huh.
It has a "D."
We said that!
The reckless Black Eyed Peas concert was held in the humid outdoors.
That's a little different than what you guys...
well, no.
I didn't get yours, that's what it is.
The concert was held in the humid outdoors.
Alright.
Ok.
Very good.
I asked you to use adjectives basically to modify the nouns in this sentence.
The concert was held outdoors, first you would have to know what the nouns were.
Let me see, one, two, three, well, three out of the four actually modify the nouns.
Which sentence is one of the nouns not modified?
Nayesha, what do you think which one?
Group 2's sentence, the outdoors.
What does it say.
The noisy Mindless Behavior concert was held outdoors.
The nouns here were what.
I said the nouns were what?
Concert.
Outdoors.
To grow that sentence, to build it, to make it a little more interesting, to give a little
more information, add a little more detail to it, you should have modified both.
Concert.
I really don't know what kind of concert it was and I know it was held outdoors.
You know.
The concert was held outdoors.
The concert was held in the beautiful outdoors.
I get a whole different picture between this one and this one, yes?
Gives a little more to the reader.
The long Mindless Hebaior concert was held in the great outdoors.
Very good sentence.
This makes me think that they went a little too far, you really didn't enjoy yourself
that much, it was long.
That's how I see it, I might be wrong.
The noisy Mindless Behavior concert...
it was noisy!
Was held outdoors.
Should have a little something about the outdoors.
The reckless Mindless Behavior... said it was reckless, I don't know what they did that
was so reckless...
I don't know!
It's up to you to continue talking about it.
The reckless Black Eyed Peas concert was held in the humid outdoors.
Doesn't sound like these guys had a great time.
Alright?
All are very good actually, that's good as well, next time you guys are definitely going
to have to do what?
Modify the other noun.