let's write some band 9 complex sentences for this IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 topic I'll
show you how to convert simple ideas into complex sentences for each part of your answer starting
with the introduction to the overview and body paragraphs it's Asiya let's get started [Music]
if you're wondering just how important complex sentences are take a look at the
Task 1 band descriptors that IELTS examiners use to mark your answers
a band 7 in grammatical range inaccuracy requires a variety of complex sentences a band aid a wide
range of structures while a band 9 just refers to full flexibility so yes it looks as if a few
complex sentences would help us a lot in task 1. for today's lesson I've chosen this typical
Task 1 question the charts below show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK
all of these nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much summarize the information by
selecting and Reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant write at least
150 words below you can see three pie charts the first is sodium shows What proportion of sodium
we consume with each meal breakfast lunch dinner snacks the other two give the same information
for saturated fat and added sugar now then let's look at each part of the report what I'm gonna do
is start off each part with some simple ideas and show you the possible ways to join them together
to make some really effective complex ones each report begins with an introduction where you
explain what is being described looking at the question we can see it has two main elements
pie charts compare the average amounts of three nutrients in the diets of your care adults these
nutrients can be bad for the health if I wrote These two simple sentences in the test it would be
fine but we can make it better how about this the three pie charts shown compare the average amounts
of three potentially unhealthy ingredients namely sodium saturated fat and added sugar so instead
of saying that the ingredients can be bad for the health we can use the adverb potentially to
indicate possibility and the adjective unhealthy potentially unhealthy ingredients and then we
simply name the three ingredients namely sodium citrated fat and added sugar we can then add more
information by using a simple connector like that or which which are consumed by British adults a
typical meal times of breakfast lunch and dinner as well as snacks in this case because the subject
of the second part of the sentence is the same as the subject in the first part the ingredients
we can admit which are and say sodium saturated fat and added sugar consumed by British adults
the next part of our answer is an overview give a short summary what does it all really mean write
a sentence or two that clearly shows that you have understood the significance of what you see
put it near the beginning or leave it until the end I recommend putting it right after your
introduction while you still have enough time to write it this part is interesting because we can
do it in several different ways when we look at the three meals the simplest way to describe them
is this the highest consumption rates are a dinner snack time and then lunch come next breakfast
is where the lowest percentages are found and most reports would try to connect all that in
one sentence and very often it just looks like a list with a couple of simple connecting words like
and and but for example the highest consumption rates are a dinner then snack time and lunch come
next while breakfast has the lowest percentages again no complaints the sentence is grammatically
correct but it's nothing special enough of you looks better if we add something to show
we've understood what the data provided is really all about we could use one of these it is clear
that it is evident that or it is striking that striking just means very evident very noticeable
another way to make the sentence more complex is by using a conditioner with if or when if we
take the three additives in combination it is clear that the highest consumption rates occur
at dinner and snack time a conditional structure when used appropriately and accurately well how
push up your band score the percentages for lunch are not far behind those at snack time
so we can write this followed closely by lunch while breakfast is the meal in which the lowest
average percentages are revealed and please note the use of while as a connector to show contrast
our complex sentence is now if we take the three additives in combination it is clear
that the highest consumption rates occur at dinner and snack time followed closely by lunch
while breakfast is the meal in which the lowest average percentages are revealed there is one more
little thing remember that sentence complexity is not just how long the sentence is but also
the complexity of the structures used notice that we have a great example of the passive voice are
revealed instead of just saying the breakfast has the lowest average percentages we now have
it is the meal in which the lowest average percentages are revealed or seen if you
prefer it's much more complex we can add another complex sentence to our overview comparing the
three nutrients in terms of different meals in simple terms we can say this
at dinner sodium and saturated fat consumption are at their highest added sugar predominates
at snack time we could just connect these two together but is a possibility because it joins
two ideas in a relatively simple way like I like football but my sister prefers tennis
not very adventurous though instead we can simply substitute it for while or wear rats at dinner
sodium and saturated fat consumption are at their highest whereas added sugar predominates at snack
time great how about however however is a bit more complicated it's a pretty heavy word isn't it
every time we hear it or read it we know something important is coming next but however also looks
back at what was written before our previous sentence was about comparing the different meal
times so let's look in more detail at the three nutrients what if I begin the sentence like this
however when we look more closely at the three nutrients a dinner sodium and saturated fat
consumption are at their highest whereas added sugar predominates at snack time that is a complex
sentence now before we go on with some more examples let's pause for a moment to compare some
of these linking words we use in the middle of the sentence to show contrast first we have wild
whereas although with these we put a comma before I don't eat meat although I occasionally eat fish
we can also use a simple butt instead then we have connectors like however nevertheless on the
other hand with these you must put a semicolon before them and a comma after I don't eat meat
semicolon however comma I occasionally eat fish instead of a semicolon before however you could
put a false stop although with the semicolon the sentence is more complex just remember
this you cannot connect two Clauses or two simple sentences by simply putting a comma before however
this is a very common mistake and many native speakers make it but you won't because you know
that before however nevertheless and on the other hand you need either a semicolon or a full stop
in this lesson we're only paying attention to the grammatical structures and their complexity
to learn how to analyze the charts select information for your report what to write
in your overview and in your body paragraphs check out my step-by-step IELTS courses which can
help you meet all the band 7 plus requirements I'll link them in the video description below
and now let's go back to our topic as we move into the body paragraphs let's discuss each meal time
in more detail starting with breakfast we see two things the lowest rates are at breakfast there
is very little variation between the three ingredients at breakfast in body paragraphs
It's always important to mention the data the numbers look how we can do it here the lowest
rates are at breakfast where the figures for all three additives hardly vary with both saturated
fat and added sugar at 16 of their respective totals and sodium at three percentage points less
we used a clause starting with where to refer specifically to breakfast
and then we add a long phrase that begins with both this is a highly complex sentence
just to make it clear this is a band 9 level of complexity and you don't have to go as far to get
a band seven I'm just showing you different things you could do lunch at lunch the data
is also quite similar for Row three ingredients the percentages for the three are higher at lunch
let's merge them the lunchtime data also show broad similarities though the percentages for
all three are higher than breakfast with both sodium and saturated fat it's slightly more
than a quarter of the totals and added sugar add a fifth we're comparing lunch to breakfast pointing
out the general of broad similarities and put in another very useful contrasting connector though
it marks the differences in percentage points by the way a quarter is 25 and a fifth is 20 percent
turning to other interesting data in all four meal times the distribution of both sodium and
saturated fat is very similar with this type of report where we're comparing different features
we're not supposed to mention the reasons why the data is as it is however it would be nice
to somehow use it because or scenes or as there is a way we can explain why the distribution of
sodium and saturated fat is very similar using the percentages look both sodium and saturated
fat show similar distribution patterns since there is never more than three percentage points
difference between the two over the four areas studied at common Linker we use is for example
nothing wrong with it but to add some variety try out as far as something is concerned which means
in the case of as far as sodium is concerned over two-thirds is consumed either a dinner 42 percent
or lunch 28 percent in comparison with breakfast 13 and out of regular meal time snacks 17 also
avoid the temptation to make your sentences too long too complex it's much better to add a great
connector like likewise or similarly at the start of a new sentence likewise saturated fat
consumption is at its highest at dinner followed by lunch whereas breakfast and snacks standard
16 and 19 respectively with added sugar we also have the chance to explain and compare pointing
to how different the overall pattern is in this case added sugar is different almost half of this
additive is consumed during snacks the rest is evenly consumed over the three main meals
so here is the complex version however added sugar displays a somewhat different pattern
because snacks account for almost half of the total and the three traditional mealtimes may
cut the remainder in almost equal proportions varying from 16 at breakfast to 20 at lunch
we've connected all three putting however at the start and using because to explain what's going on
it's very important to make sure that all your complex sentences are clear that the reader will
be able to understand exactly the points you're making complexity and Clarity together mean a
high score accuracy is so vital after all the category is called grammatical range and accuracy
today the idea has not been to write a sample answer but if you'd like to
see an in-depth explanation of how to write a report you can watch this video and check out
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score and thank you for watching me today good luck with your preparation and your exam bye