NEED INSPIRATION FOR YOUR MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT?... YOUR PERSONAL STATEMENT IS THE MOST
CHALLENGING COMPONENT OF YOUR MEDICAL SCHOOL APPLICATION… THEREFORE IT MUST BE YOUR *BEST*
COMPONENT... EXCELLENT PERSONAL ESSAYS EXPLAIN WHO YOU ARE… AND WHY YOU WANT TO BE A DOCTOR….
REMEMBER... IT’S CRUCIAL TO SHOW...RATHER THAN TELL... WHAT EXPERIENCES PREPARED YOU
FOR MEDICAL TRAINING AND PRACTICE…. BEFORE YOU SIT DOWN TO WRITE YOUR PERSONAL STATEMENT… I’LL
SHOW YOU SOME MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT EXAMPLES TO GET AN IDEA OF WHAT’S EXPECTED OF YOU.
HI! MY NAME IS NATALIE STOBERMAN AND I’M AN ADMISSIONS ASSOCIATE HERE AT BEMO. BEFORE WE
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IN THIS VIDEO I’LL COVER... - AN AMCAS MEDICAL SCHOOL
PERSONAL STATEMENT EXAMPLE... - DETAILED ANALYSIS OF THAT EXAMPLE...
- AND I’LL GIVE YOU SOME TIPS FOR A STELLAR MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT…
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YOU WATCH UNTIL THE OF THE VIDEO…. I'LL REVEAL OUR SECRET TO WRITING A STELLAR MEDICAL SCHOOL
PERSONAL STATEMENT… SO LET’S GET STARTED! AMCAS MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT EXAMPLE
BEFORE WE GET STARTED… PLEASE NOTE THAT WE’VE REMOVED ANY IDENTIFIERS FROM THIS ESSAY...
AND SPECIFIC CITIES AND NAMES HAVE BEEN REPLACED BY GENERIC TITLES…. NOW LET’S DIVE IN!
“WHO ARE YOU?” AT 20 YEARS OLD, I STOOD FACE TO FACE WITH MY ABUELA, BUT I WAS NOW A STRANGER...
OUR RELATIONSHIP HAD BEEN ERASED WITH THOSE THREE SIMPLE WORDS. MY ABUELA, AS I HAD KNOWN HER,
WAS GONE. I HAD BEEN FIGHTING THIS REALITY FOR THE PAST FEW MONTHS, BUT WAS NOW ASSURED THERE WAS NO
CHANCE TO REVERSE THE EFFECTS OF HER DEMENTIA. IN THE FOLLOWING WEEKS, I READ MEDICAL RESEARCH
LOOKING FOR EVIDENCE OF TREATMENTS THAT WOULD HEAL HER. I FOUND ONLY LITERATURE SUGGESTING WAYS
TO SLOW HER PROGRESSION. FEARING THAT ANY ONE OF MY FAMILY MEMBERS COULD BE THE NEXT VICTIM,
I DID WHAT I COULD TO EDUCATE THEM ON THE IMPORTANCE OF DIET AND EXERCISE.
I OFTEN ESCORTED MY ABUELA TO HER DOCTOR’S APPOINTMENTS AND IRONICALLY FOUND COMFORT
AND SUPPORT IN THE SAME OFFICE WHERE WE HAD LEARNED OF HER DIAGNOSIS. THE COMPASSIONATE
DEMEANOR OF HER PHYSICIAN WAS INSPIRING. THROUGH KNOWLEDGE AND EDUCATION, SHE WAS ABLE TO PROVIDE
MOMENTARY RESPITE WHEN THE INEVITABILITY OF LOSING A LOVED ONE WAS DRAWING NEAR.
I WAS CONFRONTED BY THIS UNIQUE JUXTAPOSITION OF GRIEF AND INSPIRATION WHICH DROVE ME TO
EXPLORE MEDICINE AND THE PHYSICIAN’S ROLE WHEN TREATMENT AND PREVENTION HAVE FAILED.
THIS NEWFOUND NOTION OF COMPASSIONATE CARE LED ME INTO MY NEXT SEMESTER AT UNIVERSITY...
FORTUNATELY, I HAD THE OPPORTUNITY TO WORK WITH THE UNDER-SERVED POPULATIONS IN THE CITY
THROUGH THE ABC CLINIC. THE CLINIC’S MISSION WAS TO IMPROVE BOTH FUNCTIONALITY
AND SELF-SUFFICIENCY THROUGH REHABILITATION. I WAS PAIRED WITH A 32-YEAR-OLD FEMALE NAMED PATTI
WHO SUFFERED FROM CEREBRAL PALSY AND CYSTIC FIBROSIS... A DEBILITATING MARRIAGE THAT LEFT
HER CONFINED TO A WHEELCHAIR…. UPON MEETING PATTI, I NOTICED SHE AVOIDED EYE CONTACT AND
PRESENTED WITH A GENERAL MALAISE THAT SEEMED TO WEIGH ON HER. INITIALLY, OUR TRAINING SESSIONS
WERE TEMPLATED AND WE WERE ENCOURAGED TO FOLLOW A REGIMEN THAT WORKED FOR THE MAJORITY OF PATIENTS.
THIS PROVED INEFFECTIVE FOR PATTI. SHE RARELY SMILED AND RELUCTANTLY TRANSITIONED FROM ONE
EXERCISE TO THE NEXT. OUR TRAINING HAD ONLY BEGUN, BUT QUICKLY STAGNATED. I SOUGHT PERMISSION TO
IMPLEMENT MY OWN TECHNIQUES AND DREW ON MY PAST COACHING EXPERIENCE WITH YOUTH SOCCER PLAYERS.
I EDUCATED PATTI ON THE SHORT AND LONG-TERM BENEFITS OF SPECIFIC EXERCISES WHICH HELPED
HER MAKE HER OWN DECISIONS. I HOPED LETTING HER DETERMINE HER TREATMENT PLAN WOULD EVOKE A SENSE
OF SELF SUFFICIENCY THAT WOULD IN TURN ENABLE HER TO ATTAIN A BETTER QUALITY OF LIFE. HER MENTAL
PROGRESSION BECAME CLEAR AS THE “NEW” PATTI WAS READY TO TACKLE EACH SESSION. OUR SESSIONS
SHOWED ME THAT ADDRESSING THE PSYCHOLOGY OF THE PATIENT CAN BE JUST AS IMPORTANT AS THE PHYSICAL.
ESPECIALLY IN POPULATIONS THAT MAY BE SUBJECTED TO FEELINGS OF HELPLESSNESS, THIS ASPECT IS
PARAMOUNT. WITH A POOR PSYCHOLOGICAL DISPOSITION, EVEN COMMON PROCEDURES AND TREATMENTS CAN BE
RENDERED INEFFECTIVE. ULTIMATELY, IT WOULD TAKE A PROFESSIONAL WHO IS ABLE TO UNDERSTAND AND
LEVERAGE THE PHYSICAL AND PSYCHOLOGICAL ASPECTS OF DISEASE TO PROVIDE THE BEST OUTCOMES.
WITH THE DESIRE TO PROMOTE PATIENT ADVOCACY AND EASE THE MANY MANIFESTATIONS OF PAIN, I SOUGHT A
POSITION WHERE I COULD ASSIST IN THE TREATMENT OF DISEASE RATHER THAN THE REHABILITATION…. I
JOINED AN ORTHOPEDIC PRACTICE, SCRIBING FOR DOCTOR SMITH... IT BECAME CLEAR THAT MANY OF
OUR PATIENTS SUFFERED FROM CHRONIC CONDITIONS THAT DID NOT HAVE A SIMPLE RESOLUTION. IT WAS
DISCOURAGING TO REALIZE WE WERE LIMITED IN OUR TREATMENT OPTIONS AND COULD NOT OFFER MORE. THIS
REALIZATION CAME WITH THE ENCOUNTER OF AN 80-YEAR OLD FEMALE WITH A FAILED TOTAL KNEE REPLACEMENT.
SHE HAD BEEN TRAUMATIZED FROM HER EXPERIENCE WITH HER PRIMARY KNEE AND HAD BEEN PUTTING OFF ANY
FURTHER TREATMENT. DESPITE BEING AN HOUR BEHIND SCHEDULE, DR. SMITH SAT AND LISTENED AS BOTH A
PHYSICIAN AND A CONFIDANT. HE ACKNOWLEDGED HER SYMPTOMS, AND SPOKE TO HER AS A PERSON,
UNDERSTANDING WHAT SHE WANTED OUT OF HER LIFE. I OBSERVED THE EPITOME OF COMPASSIONATE CARE FROM
DOCTOR SMITH AND LEARNED THAT PATIENTS ARE NOT SIMPLY AN AGGREGATE OF THEIR SYMPTOMS...
HIS UNIQUE STYLE OF LISTENING AND COMMUNICATION WAS ABLE TO SOOTHE THE EMOTIONAL BURDEN
THAT MAY OTHERWISE BE SUFFERED ALONE. THIS STANDARD OF CARE IS ONE THAT I AIM TO EMULATE
AND GROW UPON IN MY CAREER SO I CAN SHOW MY PATIENTS THAT THEIR RESPECTIVE DISEASES
ARE NOT THEIR IDENTITY. I HAVE LEARNED THAT THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN A GOOD PHYSICIAN AND A GREAT
PHYSICIAN IS THAT THE FORMER TREATS THE SYMPTOMS WHILE THE LATTER TREATS THE PERSON AS A WHOLE.
THE APPRECIATION I HAVE FOR PHYSICIANS AND THEIR PROFESSION REMINDS ME OF WHEN I FELT
LOST IN THE SHADOW OF MY ABUELA’S DEMENTIA. I WAS GIVEN A HEALTHY OUTLET TO VOICE MY CONCERN
AND FOUND THAT KNOWLEDGE GOVERNS THE UNKNOWN... I SEE THAT A PHYSICIAN FULFILLS BOTH THE NEED FOR
AUTHENTIC COMMUNICATION AND THE EXPERTISE TO INTERVENE WHEN THE BODY CANNOT HEAL ITSELF.
I HAVE BUILT A PASSION TO TRANSFER THIS SAME PRIVILEGE TO OTHERS...
THROUGH COMPASSION... I WILL EMBODY WHAT IT MEANS TO TREAT THE PATIENT... NOT THE DISEASE.
DETAILED ANALYSIS OF THE EXAMPLE: HOW TO MAKE YOUR STATEMENT SUCCESSFUL
SO WHAT MAKES THIS MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT EXAMPLE GREAT?
THIS IS A COHERENT STORY OF HOW AND WHY THE AUTHOR IS MOTIVATED TO PURSUE MEDICINE...
MUCH LIKE AN ACADEMIC ESSAY, THIS PERSONAL STATEMENT IS COMPOSED OF
AN INTRODUCTION BODY PARAGRAPHS
AND CONCLUSION… WHICH MAKES IT EASY TO FOLLOW... THE INTRODUCTION HAS A GRIPPING FIRST SENTENCE
THAT CAPTURES THE READER’S ATTENTION... THE REST OF THE INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH, THOUGH SHORT,
ACTS AS A ROAD MAP FOR THE READER AND HELPS THEM UNDERSTAND THE PURPOSE OF THE STATEMENT...
THE END OF THE INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH INCLUDES A GOOD TRANSITION SENTENCE THAT
ALLOWS THE READER TO UNDERSTAND THAT THE INTRODUCTION IS OVER AND HINT AT WHAT WILL
BE DISCUSSED IN SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS... YOU MAY HAVE NOTICED THAT THE TRANSITION SENTENCES AND
PHRASES USED IN THIS ESSAY CREATE A NATURAL TRANSITION FROM ONE EXPERIENCE TO THE NEXT.
THE BODY OF THIS PERSONAL STATEMENT IS STRUCTURED AROUND TWO SOLID EXPERIENCES THAT DEMONSTRATE HOW
THE AUTHOR DECIDED TO BECOME A PHYSICIAN... SINCE YOU HAVE A LIMITED AMOUNT OF SPACE TO
IMPRESS THE READER WITH YOUR STORY... FOCUS ON THE QUALITY OF YOUR EXPERIENCES... THIS IS
EXACTLY WHAT THIS ESSAY DOES. THE WRITER USES CONCRETE EXAMPLES TO SHOWCASE THE MOST RELEVANT
QUALITIES AND MEANINGFUL EXPERIENCES. NOTE THAT THIS STATEMENT’S CONCLUSION IS
NOT A DRY SUMMARY OF THE ESSAY! WITH THE CONCLUSION, THE WRITER MAKES A
CONNECTION WITH THE ESSAY’S INTRODUCTION, WHICH MAKES THE ESSAY FEEL COMPLETE….
TIPS FOR A STELLAR MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT
NOW IT’S TIME TO SHARE OUR SECRET THAT WILL ENSURE YOUR PERSONAL STATEMENT IS ABSOLUTELY FLAWLESS!
1. REVISE YOUR ESSAY CAREFULLY... MAKE SURE YOUR STATEMENT HAS GOOD STRUCTURE, FLOW,
AND NO GRAMMATICAL ERRORS... IF YOU WANT SOMEONE TO REVIEW YOUR WORK, MAKE SURE IT’S SOMEONE YOU
TRUST... IT'S IMPORTANT THAT YOU DON'T HAVE TOO MANY PEOPLE REVIEWING YOUR PERSONAL STATEMENT…
BECAUSE TOO MANY DIFFERING IDEAS AND THOUGHTS CAN MIGHT MAKE YOU DOUBT YOUR STATEMENT... IT'S ALWAYS
A GOOD IDEA TO HAVE YOUR STATEMENT REVIEWED BY A PROFESSIONAL WHO CAN OBJECTIVELY REVIEW YOUR
STATEMENT AND GIVE YOU PERSONALIZED FEEDBACK... 2. AVOID USING THE PASSIVE VOICE IN YOUR
STATEMENT... FOR EXAMPLE, INSTEAD OF WRITING “I WAS TAUGHT BY MY PARENTS TO…”,
WRITE “MY PARENTS TAUGHT ME TO…” TRY TO START YOUR SENTENCES WITH THE SUBJECT... IN THIS CASE
“YOUR PARENTS”… AS THE OBJECT OR ACTION OF YOUR SENTENCE… WHICH WAS “WHAT THEY TAUGHT YOU”...
THIS WILL HELP YOUR SENTENCES FLOW BETTER… AND CUT DOWN ON YOUR WORDS AND CHARACTERS...
3. MAKE SURE TO AVOID CLICHÉS AND UNVERIFIED STATEMENTS.
4. BE CONCISE AND AVOID ANY FILLERS... YOU DON’T NEED TO FILL THE ENTIRE CHARACTER
COUNT... SO CHOOSE QUALITY OVER QUANTITY. 5. BE GENUINE ABOUT YOUR JOURNEY... BUT DON’T TURN
YOUR PERSONAL STATEMENT INTO AN AUTOBIOGRAPHY. THOSE ARE OUR HELPFUL TIPS TO ACE YOUR PERSONAL
STATEMENT… BUT CHECK OUT OUR BLOG TO READ MORE ABOUT MEDICAL SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT
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